…but I had to see what was inside….
It was a bright and sunny weekend morning, when I awoke suddenly to the sound of the doorbell ringing. I hopped out of bed and quickly got dressed. To my surprise, when I opened the door there was no postman standing there, just a plain box addressed to my mother, who was at work. I brought the box inside to examine it and noticed that there was an odd ticking noise coming from the box. I knew that the package wasn’t addressed to me but I had to see what was inside. I ripped it open and to my horror….
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Mrswills1 · 19 October 2020 at 11:44 am
Congratulations on your response to this week’s challenge Jamison. I like that you chose an ordinary event and made it into a cliffhanger. I can see the effort you put into choosing your vocabulary. “To my surprise” was a great way to begin a sentence and engage your reader. I enjoyed reading your text this week.🙏
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